2) The feedback that I received from Elevator Pitch No. 2 was unanimously positive. It was very encouraging, as I have a tremendous amount hope for this idea. There was nothing to change based on feedback.
3) The change that I made was based on the wrinkle that I have added to my business model. As a veteran, I was blown away when I learned that roughly half of this country's homeless reside right here in the state of Florida. Over one hundred thousand of those are former members of our nation's military. I believe that I will be able to attain support from a major non-profit, such as the American Legion or Veterans of Foreign Wars (VFW) that will go to establishing organic farms with amazing shelters like this that will provide homeless vets with work, healthy food, and a roof over their family's heads.
John,
ReplyDeleteI think you displayed confidence and provided details to your concept. You were clear as you did not speak fast and further displayed your confidence which makes for a great pitch. I also like your concept in that it helps many people including ones who have sacrificed everything for this country. Only recommendation I have would be to state figures as to how much capital you would need. Great pitch overall.
John,
ReplyDeleteFirst off I absolutely love your business idea. Not only did you find a need, but you have the potential to help so many people, that have already helped so many of us. Your pitch was so good and I think your confidence and eye contact are what made it that good. You have so much passion of your concept and I think that passion rubs off on your listener.
John,
ReplyDeleteI love this idea! You truly have hit a specific market and found a way to help many people! I like how clear spoken and confident you were throughout the whole video; the American flag is a nice touch as well! The only thing I would say, based on what feedback I received, give numbers. I know sometimes that is difficult, but investors love the numbers. Overall, great job!
John,
ReplyDeleteI think this was a brilliant idea to add this to your business model, which makes your concept that much more attractive for investors to invest in. I would say as a veteran myself that you would be able to get a lot of other veterans to help with the homeless veterans because we like to take care of our own and see positivity. Therefore, I believe you being a veteran yourself only strengthens your ability to make this concept become a reality. My one question is would you want it to start in Florida in select cities to see how the restaurants would perform or would you go to an area that is already organically food conscious to help promote this further?
Hello John,
ReplyDeleteAs a true entrepreneur, you were able to find a need within a market and how to meet that need. I think your venture concept is great and can benefit many people now and in the long run. Great job.
21st century of fast-food does have a nice ring to it. Yeah I agree with everyone else that you nailed the delivery of this pitch. Good pace and eye contact, and the idea is really good as well. I do like the addition of gearing this concept towards homeless veterans. It seems like your in this concept for the right reasons.
ReplyDeleteJohn,
ReplyDeleteTo me, the best part of your pitch is that you do a great job of delivering your it without making it sound robotic or memorized. Your pitch sounds like you're coming up with it on the spot, out of passion and extensive knowledge of your concept. And I love the addition of the non-profit to help out down-on-their-luck American Veterans!
John,
ReplyDeleteThis is great! I know a lot of veterans because my boyfriend is in the marines and they would love to hear about this idea. This Idea is very selfless and could be life changing to the veterans. I think that you spoke clear and conscise. The hand motions were a great touch and you definitely got the audiences attention.